finalizing the script

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Since the first movie shot didn't go so well with the sound, we decided to re shoot the film to get a more clear sound. When we arrived to Siesta Key, we were talking and decided that we wanted to change a couple of scenes. Instead of dealing with the wind and the freezing cold water we just stayed at the tables in front of the pavilion so we were surrounded by solid objects. Instead of me going into the water because some thing called me in there, we made it more realistic and collaborated with me getting kidnapped instead. Since we didn't have another guy to shove me in the trunk of the car, my brother took off his hat and shirt so he could look different from behind and be the "kidnapper". The script also changed a lot , but we still had the same concept about the brother and sister not seeing each other for a long time and that they were catching up on everything at the beach. They talked about school, then boys. The brother is actually a cop that supposedly had to deal with one of her boyfriends before so he joked about him throwing a guy in the back of his police car.
When they talk about the missing girls she is upset ,but then he gets a call from his lieutenant and had to leave because of the case, then she leaves and gets kidnapped. We are hoping that these changes have made a positive impact to our story line.

The Lost Script:
Rachel Peel: Rachel
Shane Peel: Shane
Kidnapper
Girl who hangs missing poster

Rachel: Hey
Shane: Hey! How are you?
Rachel: I'm good
Shane: Good, God it's great to see you? So how's school?
Rachel: It's good
Shane: Good. I don't have to worry about any boys do I?
Rachel: No (sigh)
Shane: You remind what I do right? Like the last one
Rachel: No
Shane: Yeah that's it remember when I threw him in that squad car. What was that guy's name again?
Rachel: (embarrassed) No please don't
Shane: (repeating) What was his name again? Good times!
Girl who hangs missing poster: Hey guys sorry to interrupt, but a lot of girls have gone missing so if you have any information will you please call us?
Rachel: Yeah for sure
Girl who hangs missing poster: Thank you
Rachel: What? Do you know anything about this?
Shane: Yeah it's actually a case that I am working on
Rachel: Are there any leads? Has anybody found the guy?
Shane: Not yet but five girls have gone missing in the past three months
Rachel: Oh my gosh
Shane: But we are getting close though, I can feel it. Okay?
Rachel: (depressed) Okay
Shane: I've got this you know I've got this
Rachel: I know
Shane: I've never let anything happen to you. All right?
Rachel: All right
Shane: It's my Lieutenant I've got to take this, I will be right back
Rachel: Okay
Shane: (on phone) Yes sir, of course, I will be on my way
Rachel: (answers phone call) Hey where did you go? Aw really? Definitely next week, Alright bye love you.
Rachel: (calls Shane again) Did you forget something?
*Rachel shoved into truck*
Rachel: NO please stop!!

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